Poem: "Akaan"

[ForceJudgement]

Akaan means war. The poem is in 5-7-5-7 meter - I wanted to do a haiku, but it just didn't fit with the message I chose. (I used long vowels liberally - sometimes they're part of the meter, sometimes they're not.) They all rhyme according to their meter as well.

Ni vercopaani gare emuuri!

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Sol'yc ni kemi,
bal pare par ca'nara,
sa gar iviini -
lo darasuum tracinya.

Irtaabe hettyc,
iral aar'ikase;
gar kovid ciryc,
jaal at kyorla baare.

Nu'kyr akaane,
Resol'nare dunari!
- kemi o'r aare
jii par gar tug'urci.

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Literal English translation:

Alone I walk
and wait for time,
as you hurry -
through eternal flame.

Legs burning,
thousand little pains;
your head cold
numb to rotting bodies.

No-end wars,
Resol'nare forget!
- walk in pain
just for you re-meet.

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Here's a handwritten version. My style of handwriting is rather strict to the original typeface, so that it's easier to read. I don't find it hard to write it fast, especially for letters used the most (like N, M, A, Ay, Ey, Yc, and others).

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[Vlet Hansen]

I love it! It's so satisfying to see stuff that actually works with rhyming and meter in Mando'a, instead of conversions of other poems!